Jim, I would say the key to giving a story the power to connect with readers is a one-two punch of the facts (which you lay out beautifully here) and the underlying human component to these policies. You’ve got all the facts for both policies in this one story. You might consider separating the two and making them two human interest stories. Show us how one story has negatively impacted one, two, or three different people in different locations.
Then, I think readers will be able to see the real world affects of policy 1. Then you roll out a human interest story (with facts in tow) about policy 2, then readers will clearly be able to connect the dots and think, “This administration has rolled out policy 1 and it’s had/having/will have this affect? And they’re rolling out policy 2, which is equally as bad?”
Idunno, Jim. That’s just a thought, but you’re doing a great job. I hope that helps.